judgement and phrasing; an error so bad that it begs for a re-write.
Such was the case of an article whose summary showed up in my Google alert
emails for two days in a row.
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Beauty Queen Takes on Predators, Spammers
It'sa sign of the times: The current Miss America **doesn't want to
save the world from hunger or work for world peace.** No, she wants to
help keep the kids safe on the Internet. Lauren Nelson, 20, will help
launch the new Miss America ...
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http://www.darkreading.com/document.asp?doc_id=135495 appears to be the original
offending site and http://www.first.org/newsroom/globalsecurity/157241.html has
a link to that site, -plus the quote above.
Just because Miss America may not have actually listed world hunger and world
peace in her speech, or maybe didn't donate to these causes does NOT mean she
"does not want to" end world hunger or help achieve world peace!
One can put their efforts into fighting spam and keeping the net more
kid-friendly while still wanting to end world hunger and work to achieve world
peace!
This article could've been far better written if it simply stated that Lauren
Nelson added a unique cause to those of all the collective Miss Americas, and
then went on with the rest of the article, explaining her current project and
why.
But stating that Lauren Nelson "doesn't want to save the world from hunger or
work for world peace" judges her as just that - "not wanting" to end world
hunger or work for world peace. It gives the impression that she must be somehow
less caring because she is working on a different project than the usual!
How would that make her feel?
Probably not too good!
Intended or not, this is a shoddy, offensive judgement call that does not belong
in what is supposed to be a professionally written story!
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